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tangled in his throat,
her ideal twists his vocal
chords to rapt silence
another haiku based on a idea I had as I feel asleep one night...
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kiki1690 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Student Writer
very well written!
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enigmaticsmile Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much!  (and thanks for the fave!)
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xxBoneless Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Beautifully written.
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enigmaticsmile Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks!  (and thanks for the fave)!!
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xxBoneless Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
My pleasure. :)
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Agnes-Arelia Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
A wonderful description of the way the people we fall in love with make us feel. :)
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enigmaticsmile Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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ohcryptopolis Featured By Owner May 2, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
This is incredibly beautiful. The way you wrote this is almost visceral for me.

I am getting some nice imagery in my brain. I think that this is about a woman's image being so beautiful that the man is speechless. Correct me if I'm wrong.

What threw me off a little was the word 'ideal'. I'm not sure if you meant to use it as a word for her beauty, or something else.

Anyways~ I really enjoyed reading this. Favorited. c:
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enigmaticsmile Featured By Owner May 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for the feedback, I am flattered.

I think when you have a crush on, or feelings for, spmeone you hold an ideal image of that person in your mind. Does that make sense?
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ohcryptopolis Featured By Owner May 2, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
No problem, and yes that makes sense now.

c:
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