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left wondering what
twisted pulp motivates his
kinetic blabber
Started with the image of "pulp' and worked from there...
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:iconcyranosdemet:
I'm not normally a fan of haiku... but this one works well :-)
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enigmaticsmile Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
You think so? I'm not a haiku purist, as I tend do describe moments in human nature. But I am glad you think so...
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:iconcyranosdemet:
Yes, I do... it carried to me a complete thought, which the limitations on the number of word-symbols in the fixed hiaku form makes very difficult... for me your word choices carried enough assocaited meanings that the overlap of those associations did a good job of conveying the thought. The Japanese culture is much more tightly defined in terms of those associations, many of them formalized... suspect it is easier to write that form in it's native culture than in the (relatively) wild wild west of English where the words and the culture are not fully synchronized. Short form? Good job :-)
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enigmaticsmile Jul 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Wow... that's the most impactful, thorough response to my haiku I've ever had. Normally they kind of get ignored... Thank you so very, very much.
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SunShiny-Sunflower Jul 7, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Am I getting the first comment? :flirty::heart:

I think your syllables are 5-8-5, but then again you amaze me with how your inspiration works, starts with a word and becomes a masterpiece. :heart:
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enigmaticsmile Jul 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Yes, you are the first.

- "twisted" 2 syllables
- "pulp" 1 syllable
- "motivates" 3 syllables
- "his" 1 syllable

That should be 7.

Thank you so much for your wonderful, continuous, enthusiastic support!
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SunShiny-Sunflower Jul 7, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
I thought motivates has 4 =( Sorry, not my first language, but I still try to be dandy. :D

And you're more than welcomed, I like you and your art. :):heart:
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enigmaticsmile Jul 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, I appreciate all your feedback, love and support..
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SunShiny-Sunflower Jul 7, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
I know, that's why I'm giving it to you. :)
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enigmaticsmile Jul 7, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
aw...
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